Jasmine
Please help me write correctly, Thank you! Last week we went to the beach to see sunset. Arrived there and we noticed that we would not be able to see it on that day. Hazy ocean. The beach was surrounded be something white. I am not sure we were in thick fog or it was smoke and ash due to the wildfire in California. Since August in this area where I’m living the air quality has not been very good. In the middle of September it had become much better but now the bad condition have returned. The season when we need to be cautious of the fire will come from now., however, I think we are already getting the peak.
Oct 1, 2020 6:18 AM
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Please help me to write this more correctly, thank you! Last week, we went down to the beach hoping to watch the sun as it set into the water. When we arrived there, we noticed and realized that we would not be able to see it on that day due the dense hazy air overhanging the ocean. The entire beach area was engulfed in a white mist, and I was not sure if we were in thick fog, or if it was the smoke and fine-particle ash caused by the recent and ongoing wildfires in California. Since August, the air quality has not been good in the area where I’m currently living, although in the middle of September, it had become much better. Now, though, it seems that the bad air quality conditions have returned. Fortunately, the time when we need to be cautious of fires will lessen from now on, but I think we have definitely already experienced it at its peak! Hi Jasmine. Good job! This happened in the past, so the tenses within your sentences should reflect that. Also, work on improving your vocabulary so that you can construct better, if not more natural-sounding, sentences. This bad air will hopefully clear up by the weekend, as my friends and I intend on playing some tennis. Keep writing and keep posting. I hope that this helps you.
October 2, 2020
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Please help me write correctly, Thank you! Last week we went to the beach to see sunset. We arrived there and noticed that we would not be able to see it on that day. The ocean was hazy. The beach was surrounded by something white. I am not sure if it was thick fog or smoke and ash due to the wildfire in California. Since August in this area where I’m living the air quality has not been very good. In the middle of September it became much better but now the bad condition has returned. The season when we need to be cautious of the fire will start from now. However, I think we are already at the peak.
That sounds terrible, I hope everything goes well!
October 1, 2020
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