Danish Ali
Basically I m from heaven. I mean I m from Gilgiti Baltistan the land of natural beauty. Gilgiti Baltistan is located in the north of Pakistan. It's a disputed area and between India and Pakistan. In past it was a part of Kashmir but people of Gilgiti Baltistan got there independence from dogra Raj. After got independence a people of Gilgiti Baltistan decided to join Pakistan and be a part of Pakistan. One representative of Gilgiti Baltistan came to Karachi at that time Karachi was the capital city of Pakistan to meet the governor general quid Azam to show their interest to join Pakistan. Because of Kashmir disputes they did not consider Gilgiti as their 5th province. At that time they think that in future Gilgiti Baltistan peoples help us to win the Kashmir. But it's not happen still now. We are disabled from over basic needs. For education we have to move towards capital city of Pakistan. Gilgiti Baltistan is cov by mountain and mesmerizing beauty of nature. Waters from the mountains flows like a milk. Tourists from all around the world comes to enjoy the nature.
Oct 8, 2020 1:31 PM
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Basically I'm from heaven. I mean I'm from Gilgiti Baltistan the land of natural beauty. Gilgiti Baltistan is located in the north of Pakistan. It's a disputed area and between India and Pakistan. In THE past it was a part of Kashmir but THE people of Gilgiti Baltistan got THEIR independence from Dogra Raj. After THEY got THEIR independence THE people of Gilgiti Baltistan decided to join Pakistan and be a part of Pakistan. One representative of Gilgiti Baltistan came to Karachi (at that time Karachi was the capital city of Pakistan) to meet the governor general Quid Azam to show their interest IN BECOMING PART OF Pakistan. Because of Kashmir disputes they did not consider Gilgiti as their 5th province. At that time they THOUGHT that in THE future THE PEOPLE OF Gilgiti Baltistan WOULD help us to win the Kashmir. But it HASN'T HAPPENED YET. We ARE HINDERED BY A LACK OF basic needs. For education we have to move towards THE capital city of Pakistan. Gilgiti Baltistan is covERED by mountainS and ITS NATURAL beauty IS MESMERIZING. Water from the mountains flows like milk. Tourists from all around the world come to enjoy nature.
You are an eloquent writer! Great descriptions, especially at the end with the metaphor about water flowing from the mountain like milk! I imagine that the rules of using the definite article (THE) are different in your mother tongue. It is the only recurring error you made. Excellent job!!!!
October 8, 2020
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