Kyle
[Five words: fretful, cardinal, appreciable, spur, boundless] Recently, I have felt overwelmingly fretful about my personal growth and development. In the beginning, I was highly spurred by the idea to read and learn more extensively, aiming to gain not only salary from my job. Therefore, the cardinal task for me is to make the best use of my time, working more efficiently thus earning extra time to learn by myself. Yet you know, knowledge is boundless and it's tough to make appreciable progress. Meanwhile, the older you grow, the more pressure you're bound to feel, which can only be mitigated by either making more money or making yourself more competent. This may be the underlying reason for my anxiety and worries.
Oct 7, 2021 8:48 AM
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[Five words: fretful, cardinal, appreciable, spur, boundless] Recently, I felt overwhelmingly fretful about my personal growth and development. At the beginning, I aimed to gain not just a basic salary from my job. Thus, this idea spurred me to read and learn more extensively to make the best use of my available time. I would work more efficiently to free up time which allowed me to consistently learn new concepts by myself. Yet you know, knowledge is boundless and it's tough to make appreciable progress. Meanwhile, as we grow older, there will always be a constant thought in our minds that we might not have the time to do what we wish to accomplish. With limited time, we would try and mitigate the problems by either making more money or making ourselves more competent in the things we do frequently. This may be the underlying reason for my current anxiety and worries.
I didnt use cardinal as I felt that this is not a good word to use this in case. In this paragraph, there are just too many different ideas and concepts that you are trying to force fit into one short paragraph. The sentences are abit messy, I tried to salvage this passage by adding more context and elaborated on certain ideas to make it slightly clearer. Overall, I felt that reading this makes the audience feel super uncomfortable.
October 7, 2021
[Five words: fretful, cardinal, appreciable, spur, boundless] Recently, I felt overwhelmingly fretful about my personal growth and development. In the beginning, I was highly spurred by the idea to read and learn more extensively, aiming to gain not only the salary from my job. Therefore, the cardinal task for me is to make the best use of my time - working more efficiently, thus earning extra time to learn by myself. But as you know, knowledge is boundless and it's tough to make appreciable progress. Meanwhile, the older you get, the more pressure you're bound to feel, which can only be mitigated by either making more money or making yourself more competent. This may be the underlying reason for my anxiety and worries.
Good writing Kyle, you've used the five words correctly. I had to fix a spelling error and a few grammatical errors, nothing you can't easily master.
October 7, 2021
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