FranValencia
Thanks in advance for the correction and advice. The need to change the educational system. It is important to stress the need to update the education system in Spain. A favourable classroom climate is vital to improve the learning process of students. It is necessary to emphasise the teaching of values such as empathy, respect, tolerance of frustration and the normalisation of mistakes in the learning process to the youngest children, who will then have time to learn the knowledge of the different subjects (in some countries, such as Canada, this is done in this way). Parents and school should cooperate together. The government should implement legal changes and update the education system. The media should make society aware of the importance of education in a country, Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world.
Feb 10, 2022 12:24 PM
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Thanks in advance for the correction and advice. The need to change the educational system. It is important to stress the need to update the education system in Spain. A favourable classroom climate is vital to improve the learning process of students. It is necessary to emphasise the teaching of values such as empathy, respect, tolerance of frustration and the normalisation of mistakes in the learning process to the youngest children, who will then have time to learn the knowledge of the different subjects (in some countries, such as Canada, this is done in this way). Parents and school should cooperate together. The government should implement legal changes and update the education system. The media should make society aware of the importance of education in a country, Education is the most powerful weapon which you can use to change the world.
This is good. I can't see any obvious corrections to make. I'd maybe break the sentence that starts 'It is necessary' into two shorter sentences, as it's quite long. Put a full-stop after children, then start a new sentence with 'They will then have the time...'
Feb 10, 2022 12:45 PM
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