Tang Lei
Part 1 I want to share the story of the last movie I have watched. The movie is called "maslaughter" Ping was a teenage girl lived in a nuclear family with her father, mother and a little sister. One day, in a campus party, Pingping was drugged,.raped and taken vedio by one oh his schoolmate Su whose father a senator and mother local police chief. After that Su begin to threathen Pingping with the vedio on his hand, that he wantted a deeper relationship with her. Pingping was too scared to report Su's crime, she became nervous and wired. Ping's mother noticed Ping's weird behavior, and tried to fogure it out what happened. One day, Su texted Ping and asked her out claiming to delete the explicit vedio. Ping finally decided to meet he, then Ping told a lie to her mother and managed to meet Su, but her didn't know her mother followed. Once Su met Ping, he wanted have sex with her, while Ping turnes him down, Su was soon irritated and began to hit Ping. At that very moment, Ping's mother burst in trying to stop Su, the situation was too chaotic that Ping's mother killed Su by accident. The mother and the daughter were both too scarred to clean the mess, but called Ping's father to deal with Su's body. Su's father is a particular fun of defective fiction. He knew exactly how to cover it. It took him the whole night to bury Su's body and clean the scene. Ping's father expected the police would knock his door soon or later, so, after that night, he trained his family how to make up a whole story to cover the truth. Besides, he made up a perfect alibi.
Oct 27, 2020 8:39 AM
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Part 1 I want to share the story of the last movie I have watched. The movie is called "maslaughter" Ping was a teenage girl lived in a nuclear family with her father, mother and a little sister. One day, in a campus party, Pingping was drugged,.raped and taken vedio by one oh his schoolmate Su whose father a senator and mother local police chief. After that Su begin to threathen Pingping with the vedio on his hand, that he wantted a deeper relationship with her. Pingping was too scared to report Su's crime, she became nervous and wired. Ping's mother noticed Ping's weird behavior, and tried to fogure it out what happened. One day, Su texted Ping and asked her out claiming to delete the explicit vedio. Ping finally decided to meet he, then Ping told a lie to her mother and managed to meet Su, but her didn't know her mother followed. Once Su met Ping, he wanted have sex with her. (In the last correction, this was a run-on sentence, so I shortened it)* Ping turned him down, so Su became irritated and began to hit her. At that very moment, Ping's mother burst in and tried (better this way to show that the action follows her entrance rather than occurs simultaneously) to stop Su, and the situation became so chaotic that Ping's mother killed Su by accident. The mother and the daughter were both too scarred to clean the mess, so they called Ping's father to deal with Su's body. Su's (ping’s?) father was a particular fan of detective (?) fiction. He knew exactly how to deal with it. It took him the whole night to bury Su's body and clean up the scene. Ping's father expected that the police would knock on his door sooner or later, so after that night he taught his family how to make up a whole story to cover the truth. (I’d say rather: “he created an alibi and taught it to his family”) He made up a perfect alibi.
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October 27, 2020
Part 1 I want to share the plot of the last movie I watched. The movie is called "manslaughter.” Ping was a teenage girl who lived (nuclear family is redundant since you listed them) with her father, mother, and (“her” extends to all nouns in this series) little sister. One day at a campus party, Pingping was drugged, raped, and videotaped by one of her (feminine because it refers to Pingping) schoolmates, Su, whose father was a senator and whose mother was local police chief. After that, Su begin to threathen Pingping with the video he had, saying that he wanted a deeper relationship with her. Pingping was too scared to report Su's crime, and she became nervous. (Not sure what you mean by “wired,” but I think “stressed” could work well here. Maybe replace nervous with stressed?) Ping's mother noticed her weird behavior and tried to fogure out what happened (“what happened” replaces “it”). One day, Su texted Ping and asked her out, claiming to delete (have deleted? Is this past tense?) the explicit video (if he says he will delete it, you could say “saying he would delete the video”). Ping finally decided to meet him (grammatical object). She told a lie to her mother and managed to meet Su, but she didn't know her mother was following * Once Su met Ping, he wanted have sex with her. Ping turned him down, so Su was soon irritated and began to hit her. At that very moment, Ping's mother burst in trying to stop Su, the situation was too chaotic that Ping's mother killed Su by accident. The mother and the daughter were both too scarred to clean the mess, but called Ping's father to deal with Su's body. Su's father is a particular fun of defective fiction. He knew exactly how to cover it. It took him the whole night to bury Su's body and clean the scene. Ping's father expected the police would knock his door soon or later, so, after that night, he trained his family how to make up a whole story to cover the truth. Besides, he made up a perfect alibi.
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October 27, 2020
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Tang Lei
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English
Learning Language
English