Hüseyin Can Torlak
Which city do you want to live in? Why? I want to live in New York because there are a lot of options for lifestyle. Firstly, you can work at home or you can work at the office because if you live in New York the companies offer different options for you. You can see high-rise buildings in New York, so you can feel like to come to a rich city, and you can see sports cars like Lamborghini, Ferrari, or BMW. Secondly, New York has higher life quality than other American states, so house prices and tax prices are expensive, but you do not worry. Companies know that, so they give a high salary. Finally, New York has a lot of different cultures because people come from different countries although they adapt quickly. However, a mixed culture environment is creating a big food industry, so you can see a lot of different food. You can live in New York if you want to see a lot of different options.
Mar 5, 2021 9:09 AM
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Which city do you want to live in? Why? I want to live in New York because it offers a lot of different lifestyle options. Firstly, you can work at home or in the office because companies in New York offer different options for you. Secondly, you can see high-rise buildings in New York, so you feel like you have come to a rich city, and you can see sports cars like Lamborghinis, Ferraris, or BMWs. New York has a higher life quality than other American states, so the house prices and taxes are high, but you do not have to worry. Companies know that, so they pay employees a higher salary. Finally, New York is very multicultural because people come from different countries, although they also adapt quickly. The multicultural environment creates a big food industry, so you can see a lot of different cuisines. You should live in New York if you want to see a lot of different options.
A great piece of writing, very easy to understand. Some of my changes are to make the text sound more natural, like native speech, rather than to correct errors. For example, 'you can work at home or in the office'. When we have two alternative options with the same verb you don't need to repeat the verb. E.g 'I will go the shops or the gym', 'I will eat the chicken and the fish'
Mar 5, 2021 9:42 AM
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Hüseyin Can Torlak
Language Skills
English, Turkish
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English