Chakky
【Patisserie shop】 My recent favorite patisserie shop look like a jewelry shop. The glass walled shop appearance is chic. Colorful macaron laid in a showcase,as if they try to seduce customers especially me, and well decorated cakes sit next to them and distracted me from macaron. Even the chocolate coated fruit looked wonderful which I wouldn't think so if I see it in usual environment like a super market. Atmosphere is important. Now,after I had all macaron from there,I dream about going there again. Fortunately, it's not far from my place. I maybe go there in thls weekend.
Mar 5, 2021 12:25 PM
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【Patisserie shop】 My current favorite patisserie shop looks like a jewelry shop. The glass-walled shop appearance is chic. The colorful macarons are laid in a showcase, as if they are trying to seduce the customers, especially me, and the well decorated cakes sit next to them and distracted me from the macarons. Even the chocolate coated fruit looked wonderful which I wouldn't think so if I see it in a usual environment like a supermarket. (This shows that) Atmosphere is important. Now, after I had all the macarons from there, I dream about going there again. Fortunately, it's not far from my place. I might go there this weekend.
Good attempt. I added “the” in several places to make the sentences flow better. The phrase in the bracket would help connect that sentence with the previous one nicely. 良い試み。 文の流れを良くするために、いくつかの場所に「the」を追加しました。 括弧内のフレーズは、その文を前の文とうまく結び付けるのに役立ちます。
March 5, 2021
【Patisserie shop】 My recent favorite patisserie shop looks like a jewelry shop. The glass walled shop looks very chic. Colorful macarons lie in a showcase, as if trying to seduce customers, especially me, and beautifully decorated cakes next to them distract me from the macarons. Even the chocolate coated fruit look wonderful which I wouldn't think so if I saw them in their usual environment like in a supermarket. Atmosphere is important. Now, after I had all the macarons from there, I dream about going there again. Fortunately, it's not far from my place. I may go there again this weekend.
March 5, 2021
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