The Tim じぁん!!!
It’s sunny today. We have a week-long bank holiday from October the first in China. I don’t have any schedule for anything, at least, not going out. It always crowded everywhere on these days, people even wrangle for a park slot until the police arrive. How can you be in the mood for anything when you are packed like sardines among the crowd. I choose to be smart, and study on some new recipes of pancake with my mom at home. Today’s word is “sardine”. I’m not into sardines, they are too fishy.
Oct 1, 2021 7:18 AM
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It’s sunny today. In China, we have a week-long bank holiday from October the 1st. I don’t have any plans; at least, not in terms of going out. It's always crowded everywhere during any holidays: People even jostle for a park bench...until the police arrive! How can we be in the mood for anything oleaserable when we are packed like sardines in a tin? I choose to be smart. Instead, studying new pancake recipes with my mum, at home. Today’s word is “sardine”. I’m not into sardines. They are too fishy.
Paragraphing and punctuation make the piece easier on the eye and enable pause and reflection as one reads. The question metaphor, I'd develop how I've shown - to be more inclusive and it essentially now mentions the tin.
Oct 1, 2021 11:12 AM
It’s sunny today. We have a week-long bank holiday for October the first in China. I don’t have any plans or anything at least, I'm not going out. It's always crowded everywhere these days, people even fight for a park seat until the police arrives. How can you be in the mood for anything when you are packed like sardines amidst the crowd. I choose to be smart, and learn some new recipes of pancakes with my mom at home. Today’s word is “sardine”. I’m not into sardines, they are too fishy.
Good job! Keep working! :)
Oct 1, 2021 7:26 AM
It’s sunny today. We have a week-long holiday from October the first in China. I don’t have any plans, at least not for going out. It is always crowded everywhere during holidays, people even fight for a space in the park until the police arrive. How can you be in the mood for anything when you are packed like sardines among the crowd. I have chosen to be smart, and study some new pancake recipes with my mom at home. Today’s word is “sardine”. I’m not into sardines, they are too fishy.
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Oct 1, 2021 9:41 AM
It’s sunny today. We have a week-long bank holiday from October the first in China. I don’t have any schedule for anything, at least, not going out. It always crowded everywhere on these days, people even wrangle for a park slot until the police arrive. How can you be in the mood for anything when you are packed like sardines among the crowd. I choose to be smart, and study on some new recipes of pancake with my mom at home. Today’s word is “sardine”. I’m not into sardines, they are too fishy.
Oct 1, 2021 4:40 PM
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The Tim じぁん!!!
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English, Japanese
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English