Matteo Zoccolan
Would you correct my essey please?? Actually, I strongly believe that our life is better than it used to be 100 years ago. Surely, the increasing of technology and globalization is providing us with more advantages concerning quality of life and healthy. Firstly, it cannot be denied that our healthy conditions are better than the past. The progress, for example, permit to improve our quality of life, with the discovery of cures and medicines against lot of critical illnesses. For example, if Covid-19 were born 100 years ago, people wouldn’t be able to create a vaccine in few months. Secondly, in these days we have lot of devices, such as television, computer, mobile phone, that entertain our free time. Thanks to them, we can keep in touch with people from all over the world and we can gain a piece of news instantly. Moreover, from the social point of view, we have reached lot of important steps, such as the parity between men and female. In conclusion, I think that we were really lucky to born in our society. There are still things to improve, but it is better than it used to be in the past.
28 de Fev de 2021 às 14:47
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Would you correct my essey please?? Actually, I strongly believe that our life is better than it used to be 100 years ago. Surely, the increase of technology and globalization is providing us with more advantages concerning health and quality of life. Firstly, it cannot be denied that our health is [“health conditions” = illnesses. Saying the illnesses have improved feels funny :)] better than in the past. The discovery of cures and medicines for a lot of critical illnesses, for example, is the kind of progress that improves our daily life. For example, if Covid-19 had appeared [“appeared” isn’t the only option, but “born” doesn’t work for viruses] 100 years ago, people wouldn’t have been able to create a vaccine in few months. Secondly, in these days we have lot of devices, such as televisions, computers, and mobile phones, that entertain our free time. Thanks to them, we can keep in touch with people from all over the world and we can receive news instantly [or “receive the news instantly” if you meant news articles]. Moreover, from a social point of view, we have reached a lot of important steps, such as parity between men and women. In conclusion, I think that we were really lucky to be born in our society. There are still things to improve, but it is better than it used to be in the past.
great text!
28 de Fev de 2021 às 15:04
Would you correct my essay please?? Actually, I strongly believe that our life is better than it used to be 100 years ago. Certainly the increase of technology and globalization is providing us with more advantages concerning quality of life and health. Firstly, it cannot be denied that our conditions for health are better than in the past. This progress, for example, permits us to improve our quality of life, with the discovery of cures and medicines against lot of critical illnesses. For example, if Covid-19 appeared 100 years ago, people wouldn’t be able to create a vaccine in few months. Secondly, these days we have lot of devices such as televisions, computers and mobile phone, that entertain us in our free time. Thanks to them, we can keep in touch with people from all over the world and we can gain news instantly. Moreover, from the social point of view, we have reached lot of important steps, such as parity between men and women. In conclusion, I think that we were really lucky to born in our century. There are still things to improve but it is better than it used to be in the past.
28 de Fev de 2021 às 15:00
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Matteo Zoccolan
Language Skills
English, Italian
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English