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Could you correct my story? 1 month before the trek came Canada, my second elder sister and I went to a shop at branch near our house to bought drug and beauty care to use in Canada because the price cheaper and usually has discount. The first thing I saw when we stood in front of the shop was stacks of promotion goods on the tables that disheveled but not ugly and looked like there were many products which attracted me to buy them, so I put a lot of them in my basket. After that I went in the shop, I saw the walkthroughs between each shelf enough only for 2 people stand together and the shelf has head high that it was good for me because it was privacy. But when I want to ask something about the product from the staff, I found they were talking together and ignored customers. Even though when I repeated the question, they answered, but tried to sell only one of them that gave market share to them, so I felt dissatisfied. After that, I went to pay but my sister forgot to bring membership card then the cashier tried to help by asking her phone number instead. I was very grateful because it caused me to get a 10% discount.
Feb 24, 2021 9:29 PM
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Could you correct my story? 1 month before the trek came to Canada (1), my second elder sister and I went to a shop near our house to buy medication (2) and beauty products to use in Canada because the price is cheaper and is usually discounted. The first thing I saw when we stood in front of the shop was stacks of promotion goods on the tables that looked disheveled but enticing, so I put a lot of them in my basket. After that I went into the shop, I saw the aisles were only wide enough for 2 people and the shelves were head high which is good for privacy. But when I wanted to ask the staff something about a product, I found they were talking together and ignored customers. Even though they answered when I repeated the question, but they tried to sell only one of them so that they could retain the rest, so I felt dissatisfied. After that, I went to pay but my sister had forgotten to bring her membership card, then the cashier tried to help by asking for her phone number instead. I was very grateful because it meant I got (3) a 10% discount.
(1) What do you mean? A “trek” is a “long difficult walk”. (2) “drugs” suggests something illegal (in British English anyway). “Medication” is a safer option. (3) “caused” is okay, but sounds a little negative.
February 24, 2021
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