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Sue
Could you help me to correct this sentences and make it formally? Thanks!

Hi! I want to write a letter to my clients. Here is the first sentence, but I don't know whether it is formal to be the first sentence of a letter or whether it is correct. 

' Welcome you and your families become members of  X ( X is a branch of company) from Y (the company)'

Could you help me!

Thank you very much!


Aug 20, 2016 12:20 PM
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I want to welcome you and your family as new members of "the marketing department" at "Google".

August 20, 2016
I think that your sentence is unformal.You should use linkers.
August 20, 2016
I want to welcome you and your family to become members of .....
August 20, 2016
Sue
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English
Learning Language
English