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Laura
Any mistakes? When Stella walked into the house, she was astonished to see a suitcase in the hall. She first thought that before going to work she was in hurry and didn't realize she brought a suitcase in the hall but when she got closer to that suitcase she understood it wasn't hers."Who brought this suitcase here?" she thought, but suddenly the closing of a door was heard. Something was happening, someone was in stella's house, but who? She run outside and other noises were heard coming from the garage. She opened the garage and she saw him. It was a kid! Stella immediatly asked him what was he doing in her house, and the kid answered he was trying to find his grandparents'  house but he couldn't find it, so, when it started raining he entered stella's house to not get wet. Stella helped him find his grandparents' house and when they found it, she fell happy to have helped the kid. This is how a boring day can be transformed into a special one.
Sep 10, 2016 9:34 AM
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so, when it started raining he entered stella's house to not get wet

_not to get wet.

September 10, 2016

Hi, there are some flaws; you would better post corrections into "Notebook".

Any mistakes = any mistake
She first thought = ♫ At first, she thought
She run outside = She ran outside
other noises were heard coming from the garage = ♫ other noises came from the garage
immediatly = immediat-e-ly
stella= Stella
helped him find = helped him TO find // helped him finding
she fell happy to have helped the kid = she FELT happy of ♫ having helped the kid

September 10, 2016
PT Andrea it is better "for having helped" not "of..."
September 12, 2016
Laura
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