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Zakhid
I was not asked

May be it was inappropriate to put this in this section but I was carried away by writing and wanted to know your opinions if it is worth continuing writing like this or it is absurd given that I m not a native English speaker. 



Do you still hanker for eternal peace?
How naive you are.
Do you still complain about turbulent life? 
How pathetic you are.
If you are looking for hailed reward or revenge,
You have not learnt anything from the past.
Fairness was undermined from the beginning,
You did not ask for life
Nor did you long for love and hatred,
Yet they chase you and intervene your world
Either build or demolish your future.
I still cannot comprehend 
Why I have a love?
I was not asked...

Sep 10, 2016 5:38 PM
Comments · 2

I think it's an impressive piece of writing, particularly for someone whose first language is not English.

There are a few minor errors :  'intervene in your world.'  ;  'from the beginning.'  ;  'ask for life;'  ;  '. . why I have a love? '  [if a question :  'why do I . .  ? '

Keep on writing.

September 10, 2016
Thank You for encouraging comment.
September 11, 2016
Zakhid
Language Skills
English, Korean, Persian (Farsi), Turkish
Learning Language
Korean, Turkish