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Cristina
"An English teacher motivational letter".
Here it is my Motivational letter
Would you help me to make it better?? :)
Is it enough formal and well structured?

Thanks in advance!!!


 To whom it may concern,
With this motivation letter, I hereby would like to express my interest in the new English teacher vacancy presented in your company.

My name is Cristina Ortega, from Catalonia, Spain. I have a bachelor degree in Art History. I am licensed in Universitat Autònoma de Barcelona. This degree grabbed my pursuit of communication skills, in travelling and consequently languages.
As soon as I finished my higher studies, I started joining many English courses. I have been studying this language for the last four years. Due to this fact, I found one of my deepest passions: working as an English teacher to non-native English speakers.Therefore, this year, I am preparing myself to achieve the C1 certificate to apply for an English teacher Master degree.

In Spain, English instructors are extremely demanded, in instance for whom want to increase their job prospects. Thanks to this, I had many opportunities to work in this field.  I have been working as a teacher, as I said before, for almost four years in my country. I taught people from very early ages to adults. Actually, as my passion incisively has grown up, I would like to take it to the next level: Living abroad in an English speaking country for a long period of time, to be encouraged to use regularly the language, and thereafter, to gain  much higher confidence while I use it.

I would ask you to take my candidature into account. I am very determinated and hard-working person, as well as quick-learner and easygoing. So, I guarante you that I will always do my best for the company. I attached my Cv in this email, If you may want to know further details about myself or my background, do not hesitate to ask me. 

Thanks for your time, 
I am looking forward to hearing from you. 

Your sincerely,
Cr.




Feb 23, 2018 10:14 AM
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I am not really expert in English but I appreciate your desire to achieve your goals and the steps you're following on this way. I bet you can do what you desire especially because it's related to helping others to learn. Do whatever it takes to learn and have the ability to deliver your message in life.
February 23, 2018

Hello @Cristina,

Although i am not yet fluent in english, i have noticed some mistakes in your letter.

1. we don't use abbreviations while writing formal letter (Kindly replace : ThankS by Thank you).

2. somewhere in your letter you wrote : ThankS to this. I think you should write '' Thank to this"

3. Where you wrote ''I would ask you to take my candidature into account'' According to me it is not polite. Try to be simple. I suggest you this phrase instead ''I would appreciate if my candidature is taken into account''

4. ''I am very determinated and hard-working person, as well as quick-learner and easygoing'' I think something is wrong in this sentence. You forgot to add ''a'' after ''very''

In fact just try to be simple and avoid using ''I'' abusively.

Hope this helps,

Thierry.


March 10, 2018

Thanks Omar for your intervention! Never do I get tired of receiving positive vibes, specially from these people who have similar philosophy in life. Hope I have always the necesary strenght to achieve whatever I really want. I bet you the same!

I do not know if you are an expert, but you demonstrate a great manage of the language :) 

Why are you learning English? What is your purpose?


March 10, 2018
Cristina
Language Skills
Catalan, English, French, Portuguese, Spanish
Learning Language
English, French, Portuguese