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Please help me with this paragraph, I need to make it more academic

In many countries, the law enforcement system uses lethal injections as a method of capital punishment, which is considered more humanity to the current hanging method in Singapore. However, capital punishment by lethal injection also comes with a price, a burden, especially for pharmaceutical companies. This makes me think a lot, thus I drew the picture above to depict the problem. The law enforcement system requires pharmaceutical companies to produce three lethal injection of Pancuronium Bromide, Sodium Thiopental, Potassium Chloride. However, due to morality issues and afraid of gaining bad reputation, those pharmaceutical companies refuse to produce the products (especially Pancuronium Bromide and Sodium Thiopental). Thus, due to insufficiency of those products, the death queue is so long, increasing the time waiting to be executed, which is an extremely depressing period for those inmates. As I am developing my career in pharmaceutical industry, it is important for me to be aware of those issues to better grapple with future changes.  

Mar 29, 2018 3:04 AM
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Dai, you should post this in the “Notebook” section since more people who do corrections will see it and perhaps help you modify it. While the text is not terribly long, it is much easier to correct there (IMHO) than here in the comment field. 
March 29, 2018
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