Correct my paragraph please

I'm trying to have IELTS soon. I'm practicing now on writing

would you please correct my writing paragraph.

"The bar Chart gives an overview of the total numbers of men and women who are working in a country in Europe depending on their ages and gender in 2013. Overall, it can be seen that there is a peak for the number of worked males and females in almost their average middle ages."

And Thanks in advance. 

Apr 27, 2018 4:57 PM