please help me check this essay

can anyone help me check this? thanks a lot.

May 16, 2018 12:53 PM
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Looks like you forgot to write it?
May 16, 2018

It is best to post in the "Notebook" section anything that you have written that you want corrected.   (This discussion section is meant for having written conversations with other iTalki members).

When you write things in the Notebook section, people are usually very helpful with making corrections and suggestions about how to improve the writing  :-)

May 16, 2018