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Could you please check my text and correct the mistakes you can find? 虽然我的朋友们都不太喜欢阴天气,但我下雨的时候常常出去拿着雨伞玩儿。什么时候下雨,我就很高兴了。夏天如果天气晴,晚上我就很喜欢仰望天空,因为满天都是星星。什么时候月亮出来,都特别好看。我一看到很多出来的星星,就高兴地笑起来了。它们让我想起来我的旅行。在我看来,夜间的风景比白天的漂亮得多。在夜里天气凉快,花问起来很香。因为从我的家离树林不远,所以我每天晚上可以听到夜莺的鸣叫。
Apr 9, 2019 1:06 PM
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我(As the subject appears for the first time, it can not be dropped.) 常出去撑着/打着(holding an umbrella)雨伞玩儿。什么时候下雨,我就很高兴了不管什么时候下雨我都很高兴。(I am happy whenever it's raining) 夏天如果天气晴朗,晚上我就很喜欢仰望天空(or 我就很喜欢抬头看星空),因为满天都是星星。什么时候月亮不管什么时候出来,都特别好看。我一看到很多出来的星星出来,就高兴地笑起来。它们使我记起去过的旅行。在我看来,夜间的风景比白天的漂亮得多。在夜里天气凉快,花起来很香。因为我的家离树林不远(or 从我家到树林不远,从 and 离 can't be used at the same time。),所以我每天晚上可以听到夜莺的鸣叫。

Well done! Nature is indeed the eternal source of beauty. 

Comment: You should practice more with the expression 不管....都, which corresponds to concessive expressions such as "no matter.....still " in English。

Also, you should consider posting you essay in the essay section next time! 


April 9, 2019
Thanks for your comments. They are very useful.
April 9, 2019
Thanks for your comments. They are very useful.
April 9, 2019
Paulina
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English, German, Japanese, Russian
Learning Language
Chinese (Mandarin), Japanese