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Some people believe the purpose of educations is to prepare people to be useful members of society. Others say that the purpose of education is to achieve personal ambitions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The discussion about whether people who are getting the education try to be beneficial members for their society or accomplish personal wishes in a rapidly changing world raises a thorny question. Although there are several good arguments in favor of people who want to gain their personal purposes, I tend to believe that the aim of educations could be acknowledged in the term of people who are willing to be helpful for the society as a significant phenomenon.
There might be several reasons why education is utterly essential for people so as to obtain their personal dreams. First and foremost, it can be argued that attaining any personal goals could possibly require to get education by professionals. That is to say, people should be educated by specialists in any field, otherwise, in case they face the challenges, they can not be able to tackle these hurdles without their teachers.

In spite of the above arguments, I would agree that people ought to derive benefit from education in order to be a beneficial member of their societies. In other words, the utilization of education in terms of the government should be taken into account to prepare useful members for the nation. This is because each people of the society might probably to give a hand to their nation by being very important persons such as a doctor, a teacher, an engineer, an economist, a politician and so on. Universities are primary examples, the government tend to send their young people to colleges, universities in order to obtain qualified specialists.

In conclusion, despite some people substantiate that education is for reaching personal goals, I am inclined to believe that the pros of being a useful member of society outnumber the cons of personal aims.
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Apr 28, 2020 11:34 PM
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April 29, 2020
The discussion about whether people who are getting (incorrect word choice) should receive the education in order to be become beneficial members for their society, or accomplish personal wishes in a rapidly changing world raises a thorny question. Although there are several good arguments in favor of people who want to gain for their personal purposes, I tend to believe that the aim of educations could should be acknowledged understood in terms of the people who are willing to be helpful will become helpful to for the society as a significant phenomenon.

There are several reasons why education is utterly essential for people to obtain their personal dreams. First and foremost, it can be argued that attaining any personal goals could possibly require to get education by professionals. That is to say, people should be educated by specialists in any their field, otherwise, in case if they face the challenges, they can may not be able to tackle these those hurdles without their teachers.

In spite of the above arguments, I would agree say that people ought to derive benefit from education in order to be a beneficial member of their societyies. In other words, the utilization of education in terms of the by the government should be taken into account to prepare useful members for the nation. This is because each people of person in the society might probably to give a hand to help their nation by being a very important persons such as a doctor, a teacher, an engineer, an economist, a politician and so on. Universities are primary examples, the government tends to send their young people to colleges, and universities in order to obtain qualified specialists.

In conclusion, despite some people substantiate (incorrect word choice) claiming that education should be for reaching personal goals, I am inclined to believe that the pros of being a useful member of society outnumber the cons of personal aims.
April 29, 2020
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