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Anyone can help me to correct my English text? Thanks a lot!
Hi everyone, I'm Mya. I'm going to give Vietnamese lessons on Italki. I've written an introduction in English and would love you to correct my mistakes! Thanks a lot! Below is the text:

"Hi! My name is Mya, I'm living in Ha Noi. 
I currently work as a freelance e-learning designer and developer. My clients come from all over the world such as America, Canada, France, Australia. I love exchange languages, meeting new people and discovering different cultures. 

I had 7 years living, studing and working in France. And I know very well how difficult it is to learn a language which is totally different from our mother language, but also, how interesting it is! That's the reason why I decided to give Vietnamese lessons, to help people like you discover my language in an easy and fun way. 

Anyone who learns a new language woul ask this question: How to improve quickly? For me, there are 3 factors.
First of all, your mindset. Have you ever had the feeling that you can understand and read well, but you just can't speak? In my case, yes. Before, whenever I talked in foreign language, I tried to be perfect: make a perfect sentence with perfect grammar and perfect pronunciation. And I ended up with saying nothing at all. That's the same reason why children are usually make it more easily than adults. Yes, because they are not afraid of making mistake. And you, are you ready to making mistakes and let me help you correct them? 

Factor number 2: the method. In my lesson, I won't let the grammar and vocabulary approaches you in a boring way. We will have real conversations about any subjects in life. Then I will help you understand the grammar, give you more vocabulary to express your self and correct your pronunciation. You will learn as a child learning their mother language: listen, repeat and then understand.

The last factor, and the most important to get better in learning a language is: practice, practice and practice. Learning with me, we will revise again and again what you learned, until you are able to use it naturally and confidently.

Voilà, are you ready to go with me in the adventure of learning Vietnamese? Book my lessons and I will see you soon in my class! 
Thank you for watching!"
Enjoy your day!
May 20, 2020 10:56 AM
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Thank you guys so much for your help!



May 21, 2020
Hi Mya!

Congrats on writing such a long and powerful self-introduction highlighting your skills and experiences! Here's my version of your introduction which I think would make you sound more natural to native English speakers.

Hi! My name is Mya, I'm currently living in Ha Noi, Vietnam. (Some people don't know where Ha Noi is)  
I currently freelance as an e-learning designer and developer. My clients come from all over the world such as America, Canada, France, Australia. I love to converse in different languages, meeting new people and discovering different cultures. 

I lived in France for 7 years as a student and a part time worker. Hence, I know very well how difficult it is to learn a language which is totally different from your own mother tongue but also how interesting it can be to speak it! That's why I decided to teach Vietnamese so others like yourself can learn the language in a fun way!

I've been asked, "How can I get fluent quickly?" To me, there are 3 factors:

Firstly, your mindset. Have you ever felt like you could understand through listening and reading but cannot speak well? I used to be like that! I always tried to sound as perfect as I can when speaking in a foreign language. And I usually end up saying nothing at all. That's the same reason why children are able to learn new languages quicker than adults. They are not afraid of making mistakes! Are you ready to make mistakes and learn from them with me?

Secondly, the method. In my lessons, we will learn the grammar and vocabulary through engaging conversation. Then, I will explain the grammar plus introduce to you more vocabulary to express your self and correct your pronunciation. You will learn the way a child does. By listening, repeating, making mistakes and learning.

Lastly, practice, practice and practice. Together we will review points again and again until you fully master the concepts!

Are you ready to join me on this adventure? Book me today!
Thank you for watching!"
May 20, 2020
Hi!

A few twitches, in my opinion:
  • I love exchanging languages
  • living, studying and working
  • a new language would ask this question
  • whenever I would speak a foreign language (or foreign languages)
  • children usually make it
  • afraid of making mistakes
  • ready to make mistakes and
  • I won't approach grammar and vocabulary in a boring way
  • express yourself

Hopefully it can help you.
May 20, 2020
Mya
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English, French, Vietnamese
Learning Language
English, French