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The world after COVID-19 pandemic in Japan

    In 2020, we has been influenced by coronavirus and our society has been changed a lot. Accordingly, there is a possibility that a lot of system will be changed in many fields from now on.
For instance, it is said that children should enter school in September. This is because almost all students could not study in school. It is unfair especially for students who take entrance exams. If Japanese government enforces the policy, it will change our life not only in schools but also in companies, because most companies starts the new financial year from April.
In addition to this, online system will be improved more and more. Most universities introduce many kinds of online system such as Zoom, Microsoft teams. Thanks to these, we can take classes at home. It means we do not necessarily go to school to take classes. Other than this, online shopping system such as Amazon, Uber Eats is developing in this time.
I guess we will not be able to live without online services in next decade. Furthermore, social systems especially schools and companies will be changed a lot. I think that 2020 is the time to start changing our life.

May 26, 2020 11:01 AM
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The world after the COVID 19 pandemic in Japan
OR : The world after COVID 19 : a view from Japan

In 2020 we have been influenced by the coronavirus and our society has changed a lot.
OR: The coronavirus has had a massive impact on our lives in 2020 and our society has changed a lot.

Accordingly, there is a possibility that a lot of systems in many fields will change.
OR: So, there is a strong possibility that many aspects of our lives will undergo change / evolve.

For instance ... this sentence is unclear.

It is unfair, especially...

If the Japanese government enforces this policy, it will change our lives, not only... start the new financial year in April.

In addition to this, online systems will continue to improve. Most universities introduced different online systems/platforms such as Zoom and Microsoft Teams.

Replace “other than this” by “On top of this” ... online shopping systems/platforms such as Amazon and Uber Eats are developing/expanding exponentially.

In the next decade.

social systems, especially schools and companies, will change a lot.

Changing our lives.


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May 26, 2020
Could you modify my sentences collectly?

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May 26, 2020
Thank you very much 😊
May 27, 2020
Teruya
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