Writing Clearly...
The following sentences were collected from high school student essays and published by former high school teacher "Ron Lederer".... enjoy....
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1 To collect sulphur, hold a deacon over a flame in a test tube.
2 H2O is hot water, and CO2 is cold water.
3 Three kinds of blood vessels are arteries, vanes, and caterpillars.
4 A fossil is an extinct animal. The older it is, the more extinct it is.
5 Artificial insemination is when the farmer does it to the cow and not the bull.
6 To be a good nurse, you must be absolutely sterile.
7 When you breathe, you inspire. When you do not breathe, you expire.
8 Rural life is lived mostly in the country.
9 Last year many lives were caused by accidents.
10 Heredity means that if your grandfather didn't have any children, then your father probably wouldn't have any, and probably neither would you.
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YOUR CHALLENGE:
- Identify the problem or error that causes these sentences to be unclear, and
- Offer a re-write of the sentence to make is clearer