Again this example comes from Jinglian,
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Her original post was a note entry requesting for correction. What she wrote and how the format looked like, I made the mistake in assuming that she was writing a poem about her likes. See the following link for the original post. <a href="http://www.italki.com/notebook/entry/196327.htm">http://www.italki.com/notebook/entry/196327.htm</a>;
Included below is for your easy reference. She wrote,
The Most Beautiful Things in Your Feeling
Smile to wake up from the dream.
Look at each other with a beautiful stranger in the street.
The right things are on sale.
Hear your favorite song by chance.
Find a hundred yuan in the coat you wore last winter.
Hear someone praise you by chance.
Find that there are still several hours left to sleep when you wake up.
Your Most Beautiful Feelings
When surrounding people nod their heads at you.
Or similing as you wake from a dream.
Have a look at that beautiful stranger on the street.
How about things you wanted are on sale?
Perchance, you hear your favorite song.
And find a hundred yuan note in the coat you wore last winter.
On hearing a praise for you?
Or to find that there are still more sleeping hours remain when you arise.
Then she wrote back to say that those are independent sentences along with the original Chinese! What a big difference. As you can see below, writing is totally different in different situations. I hope that you guys can learn the differences. I thank Jinglian for this opportunity.
My comments
Literal translation
Figurative/polished version
Your original
你感觉最美的事情
The Most Beautiful Things In Your Feeling
Things you felt are the most beautiful.
The most beautiful things in your mind.
1. 所有的人都觉得你说的对.
All the people around you agree with you.
All people felt what you said was correct.
Everyone thinks what you said was correct.
2. 从梦中笑醒。
Smile to wake up from the dream. 這有“美夢發後, 醒時滿臉笑容” 的含意 . Similing as you wake from a dream.
From dream inside smiling upon wakening.
Awakened by smiles in your dream.
3. 和一个漂亮的路人对视。
Look at each other with a beautiful stranger in the street.
With a pretty looking pedestrian looking at each other.
Exchanging glances with a good-looking passerby on the street.
Exchanging glances with a good-looking pedestrian.
4.发现心仪的东西半价出售。
The right things are on sale.
Discovering your favourite things at half price sale.
Discovering your favourites on sale at half price.
5. 偶然听到最喜欢的歌。
Hear your favorite song by chance.
Accidentally/”By chance” you hear your favourite song.
Fortuitously, your favourite song was heard.
6.在去年冬天的外套里找到100元钱。
Find a hundred yuan in the coat you wore last winter.
In last winter’s coat you found 100 yuan.
Finding a hundred yuan note in the coat you wore last winter. I like your version better with English grammar fixed.
7.偶然听到别人夸自己。
Hear someone praise you by chance.
By chance, you heard someone praising you.
8.醒来发现还能睡几个小时。
Find that there are still several hours left to sleep when you wake up.
Upon wakening, you found that you can sleep for a few hours more.
