I wonder at times
When I lay down to sleep at night.
What she’s thinking of,
And who’s on her mind.
She had cut through my fences barriers.
She stole my heart And stolen my heart.
Shattered are my defences
And left me bleeding when as she did departed.
For a period of time
That felt like a never-ending eternity,
I paid for a ‘crime’
I never did commit.
By She renounceding her coveted company for me!
Now that she’s in my life again...
Although I’m forgiven,
Nothing’s the same!
And just being with her,
Tearings my heart with in pain.
Yet why at night
She claimeds my thoughts?
It’s just not right
That I’m losing what I’ve sought.
With Peace and strength
To heal my plight.
Only Love and friends to can bring back the light
Though no matter what I do,
She’ll always be a part
Of everything that's important
And dear to my heart.
This is why I lay
In this here and now
And Remembering the times we’d play’d.
The Memories... we once shared,
She would remembers how she cared.
So sad. You need to learn how to punctuate your poem to give it a more expressive mood. May I suggest this as your title, "Did She Remember?"
thank you^^ i actually like the title suggestion. I'm never exactly sure where to put puncuation marks... and it is a little sad :/ the tone and mood that is.
Thanks for your wonderful contribution. The colored changes are my suggestions. Feel free to ignore them if they didn't convey the right sentiment :)