Thanks.  If you continue to write and express yourself, your own way of polishing will become better.  This is how I started.  Express my feelings on paper; have them corrected and learnt what was being corrected.  It is so much easier nowadays.  In the old days, I have to ask people whom I know and yet did not want them to know.  Today, you can have people from all corners of the world to help and remain "anonymous".

Thanks Jeff. Yes I though at a one sided love, an apparent love.

Your your polishing it makes it brilliant.

The last three images of the flames looks like dancers!  Here's my original thought when I was mesmerized by the flames.

Swirling fires columns of fire,

A curtain of falling tears.

A spike of passion,

A well of sighs.

Thanks.  Now I can do some polishing.

The fire burns, releasing its light and heat.

I lie as I wait for your return.

I fell asleep;

Overwhelmed by its vibrant color.

Then your fragrance wafted and woke me up.

In embrace, a kiss for you,

But now only a log left smoking weakly.

The frost no longer lingering with the moon,

Clasping you, my beloved cold flame.

From what I read, it gives me the sense that this is a one sided love now?  This is because of the images of one log is left and its heat is gone now; a cold flame etc.

I make an attempt.

Fire burns and releases its bright heat

I'm laying waiting your return

I fall asleep overwhelmed by its vibrant colour

Then, sudden your smell waked me

I embrace you  I hold you, I kiss you

Only a log was remain it smokes weakly

Outside the moon and the frost does not linger

I do clasp you, mine beloved cold flame