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Some people think that the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.


In recent years, some people has been strongly arguing that forcing prisoners to be in jail longer than the current existed punishment will lower crime rates, while others think that a number of other solutions can be effective alternatives. In this essay, I am going to explore the two different perspectives with my own opinion.


First of all, convicts in a prison for a long time could have more opportunities of regretting of their offenses than those punished softer sentences. This is mainly because, rehabilitation programs offered in penitentiary would help the offenders to rethink while serving their sentences. For example, someone who committed a child abuse must receive an education, which makes him to repent his past in order not to re-offend. Additionally, longer jail sentences will play a leading role in deterring for anyone thinking of committing a crime. Consequently, being in a prison longer will be able to lessen crime in the future.


On the contrary, giving punishment criminals with community service order would be effectual alternative of diminishing crime. The chief reason is that the injunction allows inmates to improve their characters, giving them the opportunity of returning positive impact to society. It is also shown in an article on the crime investigation that most people sentenced to 200 hours of social service activities would not be likely to re-offend. Therefore, a number of countries could decrease their second offense rates administering public-service punishment, which have affirmative influences on both their societies and offenders.


In conclusion, although both positions have their strengths, I absolutely agree with the former view. The reason why longer prison sentences could be more efficient to lower crime is that every prisoners have potential of committing a second conviction.

Jul 13, 2014 1:34 AM
HYEOKMIN KWON
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