Lily Wong
Could you help me correct my writing? What is it that you want to achieve in your life? What are your dreams? What makes you happy? My answer: I want to be able to call myself successful before I die. I think being successful is having the freedom and options to do whatever I want as well as feeling that I’ve helped people with my skills and talents. I was asked this question yesterday but I wasn’t sure if I could answer yes.我想要能夠在死之前說我自己很成功。我認為成功是擁有足夠的自由還有選擇去做任何我想要的事。還有用自己的天賦和技能幫助別人。昨天我被問到這個問題,然而我不是太確定我能說我是。 I've already been to forty countries, and it has always been my dream to travel more extensively and widely. I love talking to different people and learning from them. 我已經去了四十個國家,所以更深入更廣的去旅行一直都是我的夢想。我喜歡和不同的人說話和學習。 There are so many things to make me happy. I made a list of 30 things that make me happy a few years ago. For example: Exploring new places and making new friends. 有很多事情讓我開心。幾年前我列了一個表寫出三十件讓我快樂的事情。例如:探索新的地方和交新朋友。
Oct 22, 2020 2:15 AM
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Could you help me correct my writing? What is it that you want to achieve in your life? What are your dreams? What makes you happy? My answer: I want to be able to say that I am successful before I die. I think being successful is having the freedom and options to do whatever I want as well as feeling that I’ve helped people with my skills and talents. I was asked this question yesterday but I wasn’t sure if I could answer yes.我想要能夠在死之前說我自己很成功。我認為成功是擁有足夠的自由還有選擇去做任何我想要的事。還有用自己的天賦和技能幫助別人。昨天我被問到這個問題,然而我不是太確定我能說我是。 I've already been to forty countries, and it has always been my dream to travel more extensively and widely. I love talking to different people and learning from them. 我已經去了四十個國家,所以更深入更廣的去旅行一直都是我的夢想。我喜歡和不同的人說話和學習。 There are so many things that make me happy. I made a list of 30 things that make me happy a few years ago. For example: Exploring new places and making new friends. 有很多事情讓我開心。幾年前我列了一個表寫出三十件讓我快樂的事情。例如:探索新的地方和交新朋友。
Wow, forty countries is amazing! Your writing is good it just needed some corrections
October 22, 2020
Could you help me correct my writing? I want to be able to call myself a success before I die. In that respect, I think being successful is having the freedom and ability to do whatever I want, coupled with the feeling that I’ve helped people with my skills and talents. I was actually asked this question yesterday, but I wasn’t sure if I could honestly answer it with a “Yes.” I've already been to over forty countries, yet, it remains my dream to travel even more extensively, as I love talking to different people and learning from them. There are so many things that can make me happy. In fact, a few years ago, I had even made a list of thirty things that made me happy, the top of which was exploring new places and making new friends.
Hi, Lily. I was a bit confused about what you wanted done with your post, so I just modified your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears. I hope that is of some help to you. Keep practicing and keep posting.
October 22, 2020
Could you help me correct my writing? What is it that you want to achieve in your life? What are your dreams? What makes you happy? My answer: I want to be able to call myself successful before I die. I think being successful is having the freedom and options to do whatever I want as well as feeling that I’ve helped people with my skills and talents. I was asked this question yesterday but I wasn’t sure if I could answer yes.我想要能夠在死之前說我自己很成功。我認為成功是擁有足夠的自由還有選擇去做任何我想要的事。還有用自己的天賦和技能幫助別人。昨天我被問到這個問題,然而我不是太確定我能說我是。 I've already been to forty countries, and it has always been my dream to travel more extensively and widely. I love talking to different people and learning from them. 我已經去了四十個國家,所以更深入更廣的去旅行一直都是我的夢想。我喜歡和不同的人說話和學習。 There are so many things to make me happy. I made a list of 30 things that make me happy a few years ago. For example: Exploring new places and making new friends. 有很多事情讓我開心。幾年前我列了一個表寫出三十件讓我快樂的事情。例如:探索新的地方和交新朋友。
Before I die I want to be able to call myself successful. Having the freedom and options to do whatever I want and helping others with my skills and talent is what I think success is.
October 22, 2020
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Lily Wong
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English, Spanish
Learning Language
Spanish