The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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CONCLUSION
To conclude, fast access to information available through the internet has many positives, including the ??? (see note) of educational and research processes, the opportunity for people to spread useful and vital data over the world and finally, the possibility of more interesting and versatile communication. I believe, that knowledge's affordable should be controlled by government, but it is undoubtedly, modern technologies cause our well-being.
Your last sentence needs to be changed. You are bringing in a NEW argument (that the affordability of the internet -- meaning how much it costs people to access the internet?) should be controlled by the government). Do not do that here. This is not part of the essay. Don't use "modern technologies" -- use the word "internet" as the essay is talking about the internet not modern technologies (which could be the internet, smart phones, modern medical equipment, computers and so much more).