Chema Rodriguez
Informal email: Sorry, I haven’t been in touch for a while, but I have been snowed under at work. Hope you’re well. Guess what! I left Miguel’s business, which was an older travel agent, and I’ve been starting my own Travel Agent. Firstly I want to say you that I’ll be glad if you come with me in the new Travel Agent. I have a lot of work and I need help. I know you since the university and I think you are the best option for the vacancy. On the one hand you have huge experience as a traveler agent, you have been working for 10 years as one. In addiction you sold me my honeymoon, the best travel I’ve ever done. On the other hand I’ve know that you aren’t well in your job. Because Jaime, who was our partner in the school, told me that he saw you very sad. We know that the guilty is your boss: an absolutely awful person. If you come with me, it won’t be the same. I’ll promise you. I’ll expect your response in the next email. However you mustn’t be worry about it. We are friends a long time ago and we’ll be friends after you response. Cheer Chema
Feb 23, 2021 7:04 PM
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Informal email: Sorry I haven’t been in touch for a while, but I have been overwhelmed at work. Hope you’re well. Guess what! I left Miguel’s business, which was an older travel agency, and I am starting my own Travel Agency. I hope you will come with me to the new Travel Agency. I have a lot of work and I need help. I have known you since university and I think you are the best option for the vacancy. You have 10 years of experience as a travel agent. In addition, you sold me my honeymoon, the best trip I’ve ever gone on. I’ve heard that you aren’t happy in your job. Because Jaime, our partner from school, told me that he saw you very sad. We know that this is your boss’s fault: an absolutely awful person. If you come with me, it won’t be the same, I promise you. I look forward to your response. However, you mustn’t worry about it. We have been friends a long time ago and we’ll be friends no matter what. Cheers, Chema
Very nice email! Your paragraph structure is elegant and the tone is usually clear. It may help to practice the past perfect tense and the past participle tense. It is also okay to use fewer transition phrases (such as “on the other hand” or “in addition”) in informal writing.
February 23, 2021
Informal email: Sorry, I haven’t been in touch for a while, but I have been snowed under at work. Hope you’re well. Guess what! I left Miguel’s business, which was an established travel agent, and I’ve been starting my own Travel Agency. Firstly I want to say you that I’ll be glad if you join me in my new Travel Agency (or - my new company). I have a lot of work and I need help. I have known you since university and I think you are the best option for the vacancy. On the one hand you have huge experience as a travel agent, you have been working for 10 years as one. In addition you sold me my honeymoon, the best trip I’ve ever had. On the other hand I’ve know that you aren’t happy in your job, because Jaime, who was our classmate in school, told me that he saw you looking very sad. We know that the guilty party is your boss: an absolutely awful person. If you come with me, it won’t be the same. I promise you. I hope you will get back to me soon. However you mustn’t worry about it. We have been friends for a long time and we’ll be friends after you respond. Cheers Chema
Well done, this is great. A nice informal tone. I don't know the requirements, I guess: Explain what you have been doing Say what you want your friend to do Explain why you think they can do it Maybe the requirements refer to a job. Anyway I expect you covered what you needed to do. If you have any questions let me know.
February 23, 2021
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