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Well, for me, I think the best new product is the new smartphone named Xiaomi 12 pro, you know nowadays the smartphone is more and more improtant in our daily life, it's so convenient such as we can use it to pay, so if the smartphone is easy to use is so important, and the Xiaomi 12 pro is very easy to use, thank you.
Jan 29, 2022 7:40 AM
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(Well, personally,) I think the best new product is the new smartphone named Xiaomi 12 pro. (You know) Nowadays, the smartphone is becoming more and more improtant in our daily lives. It's so convenient. We can use it to pay for things and stuff. So making smartphones easy to use is so important, and the Xiaomi 12 pro is very easy to use. Thank you!
I added parentheses around some phrases that are good for spoken English but should be dropped in essay writing to reduce redundancy.
Jan 29, 2022 8:34 AM
Well, for me, I think the best new product is the new smartphone named Xiaomi 12 pro, you know nowadays the smartphone is more and more improtant in our daily life, it's so convenient such as we can use it to pay, so if the smartphone is easy to use it so important, and the Xiaomi 12 pro is very easy to use, thank you.
Jan 29, 2022 8:11 AM
Well, for me, I think the best new product is the new smartphone named Xiaomi 12 pro, you know nowadays smartphones are more and more important in our daily lives. They are so convenient, so much so that we can even use them to pay, so it is important that the smartphones are easy to use, and the Xiaomi 12 pro is very easy to use, thank you.
What a brand Xiaomi is!
Jan 29, 2022 8:08 AM
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