This is after my 10th attempt. I would like to speak like this( the goal is to speak better than this, of course) in my 1st attempt. Any tips and suggestions and feedback?
Thanks for your time!
Excellent job! It was very easy to understand you. When you talk, you have a slight accent, but it isn't a very strong at all and doesn't stop me from understanding you. So, I wouldn't worry about it.
There are only two phrases that didn't sound natural. In other words, as a native speaker I wouldn't have said them that way; however, I still understood what you meant:
"For the most part of the year" > Most of the year...
"I ran after a long time" > I hadn't run in a long time.
Again, great job! Keep up the good work!
P.S. You mentioned that you live somewhere where the weather is cold most of the year? Where do you live?