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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. ______________________________ INTRODUCTION Digital technology has been becoming a part of people's day-to-day life for a last couple of decades. Work, studying and entertainment without modern devices and the Internet are hardly imagined. Online network has allowed to receive access to any kind of data. But experts around the world debate whether affordable information is blessing or whether some materials may be harmful for ordinary users. I strongly advocate the former view, and this essay will use examples from my own knowledge to demonstrate this point and prove arguments.
Feb 20, 2021 7:11 PM
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The internet has greatly increased our access to information. To what extent do you think this is a good thing? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. ______________________________ INTRODUCTION Digital technology has become a part of people's day-to-day life in the last decades. (better: in recent decades) Work, studying and entertainment without modern devices and the Internet are hardly imaginable. Online network has allowed us access to all kinds of information. But experts around the world debate whether access to affordable information is a blessing or whether some materials may be harmful to the public. I strongly agree with the former view, and this essay will use examples from my own knowledge to demonstrate this point and prove arguments.
use "information" rather than "data" Use "to the public" rather than "ordinary users" Use "agree" rather than "advocate" In your introduction, don't say "the former view" -- you can say, "the view of the experts who believe this access is good" In your last sentence, don't tell what you will do in the essay; it's not necessary. Just say "I strongly agree with those who believe that free access to information is beneficial." If you want to show the counter-argument, you can put that in your paragraph II.
February 20, 2021
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