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People throughout both developed and developing worlds argue whether they should devote their lives to main activity sake of the major goal, or whether a life-work balance is more important. This essay will use arguments and examples from my own knowledge discovering, what exactly people should choose. To begin with, psychological researches show that persons, who can combine various aspects of their lives, better handle stressful situations. It is not surprising, hobbies, spending time with relatives and friends give them support and inspire them. According to scientific reports, the endorphin level increase while doing creative work, taking care of members of family or pets, or going in for sports. Hence, such parts of life as hobbies and relationship with close people must be included in day-to-day life sake of mental health. Although, some people may believe concentration on the certain business during the whole life help to achieve more impressive results, scholars argue switching between different activities more useful. Turn to examination of human brain, biologists state our brain can not to be focused on one mental activity more than 30-40 minutes, that means working over this time is less efficient. Thus, necessity of a life-work balance is a biological need. To conclude, sometimes it can be seem that influential persons do not pay attention to other businesses and processes beside their work, however, academic researches point to importance of leisure time. Therefore, people should try to achieve a life-work balance, just worth remembering we are different and optimal ratio work time, leisure and sports is individual.
Feb 23, 2021 12:46 PM
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People throughout both developed and developing worlds (this essay does not ask you to compare these two worlds) argue whether they should devote their lives to a main activity for the sake of their major goal, or whether a life-work balance is more important. This essay will use arguments and examples from my own knowledge discovering, what exactly people should choose. (Do NOT include this type of sentence. This essay asks for your opinion so say it here). To begin with, psychological research shows that people who can combine various aspects of their lives, are better able to handle stressful situations. This is not surprising, pursuing their hobbies and spending time with relatives and friends gives them support and inspires them. According to scientific reports, the endorphin level increases while doing creative work, taking care of members of family or pets, or going in for sports. (Why are endorphin levels important?) Hence, parts of life such as hobbies and relationships with close friends and family must be included in day-to-day life for the sake of mental health. Although, some people may believe that concentrating on the most important business during ones whole life helps to achieve more impressive results, scholars argue that switching between different activities can be more useful. Turning to the examination of human brains, biologists state our brain can not focus on one mental activity for more than 30-40 minutes, this means that working for longer than this time is less efficient. Thus, the necessity of a life-work balance is a biological need. To conclude, sometimes it can seem that influential persons do not pay attention to other businesses and processes beside their work, however, academic research points to the importance of leisure time. Therefore, people should try to achieve a life-work balance, it is just worth remembering we are all different and the optimal ratio of work time, leisure and sports is individual.
This is pretty good and reasonably well argued. I do not think 'This essay will' sentences are good. All they do is say you will answer the question, that is what you have to do! I wouldn't rely too much on 'scientific research'. You can't remember research about everything. Your conclusion is good.
February 23, 2021
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