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Daily writing practice 20/10/20 For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Do Attention Should Be Given to the Study of Chinese . You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below: 1.近年来在学生中出现了忽视中文学习的现象 2.出现这种现象的原因和后果;3.我认为… With China’s reform and opening up, intercultural communication between China and western countries is becoming increasingly more frequent than before. A good command of at least one second language, especially English is essential for Chinese students. As a result, recent years have seen countless Chinese students paying close attention to learning foreign languages while neglecting the study of their mother tongue. From my perspective, apart from the great emphasis put on studying a foreign language, another reason for Chinese students not enthusiastic for learning Chinese is that the current curriculum of Chinese study is much too boring for most Chinese students. For instance, my high school classmates often complained to me about studying the sounds and meanings of very uncommon words which are hardly used in our daily life, but we have to spend days working on them, because they account for 15 percent of marks! In my opinion, these students will be fed up with reading the works of ancient Chinese philosophers and thinkers before the 20th century, and thus knowing less and less about the values and struggles, the joy and sorrows of the great people, which is what makes the nation survive till now and become the second largest economy in the world. Therefore, I think we should change the current curriculum and let students put more effort on appreciating the rich cultural heritage of novels, dramas, and even films. In addition, preparing students for their future by developing skills of making presentations in Chinese can also stimulate pupils to study harder.
Oct 20, 2020 12:25 AM
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Daily writing practice 20/10/20 For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Do Attention Should Be Given to the Study of Chinese . You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below: 1.近年来在学生中出现了忽视中文学习的现象 2.出现这种现象的原因和后果;3.我认为… With China’s reforms and opening up to the world, cultural exchange between China and western countries increasingly becomes more frequent. A good command of at least one second language, especially English, is essential for Chinese students. As a result, recent years have seen countless Chinese students focusing on learning foreign languages while neglecting the study of their mother tongue. From my perspective, apart from the great emphasis put on studying a foreign language, another reason for Chinese students to be less enthusiastic about learning Chinese is that the current Chinese curriculum is too boring for most Chinese students. For instance, my high school classmates often complained to me about having to learn the sounds and meanings of very uncommon words which are hardly used in our daily life, but they had to spend days working on them because they account for 15 percent of the final grade! In my opinion, these students will waste all their effort trying to read the works of ancient Chinese philosophers and thinkers before the 20th century. They will know much less about values and struggles, joys and sorrows of the great people, which made the nation survive and become the second largest economy in the world. Therefore, I think we should change the current curriculum and let students put more effort on appreciating the rich cultural heritage of novels, dramas, and even films. In addition, preparing students for their future by developing skills of making presentations in Chinese can also stimulate pupils to study harder.
Grammar wise you did really good. I only recommended rephrasing things where it was hard to follow your thought. In my opinion, you need to summarize the story with a different final sentence.
October 20, 2020
Daily writing practice 20/10/20 For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay on the topic of Should Attention Be Given to the Study of Chinese. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below: 1.近年来在学生中出现了忽视中文学习的现象 2.出现这种现象的原因和后果;3.我认为… With China’s reform and opening up, intercultural communication between China and western countries is becoming more frequent than before (or 'becoming increasingly frequent', but both together sounds odd). A good command of at least one other language, especially English, is essential for Chinese students. As a result, recent years have seen countless Chinese students paying close attention to learning foreign languages while neglecting the study of their mother tongue. From my perspective, apart from the great emphasis put on studying a foreign language, another reason for Chinese students not enthusiastic for learning Chinese is that the current Chinese curriculum is much too boring for most Chinese students. For instance, my high school classmates often complained to me about studying the sounds and meanings of very uncommon words which are hardly ever used in our daily life, but we have to spend days working on them, because they account for 15 percent of our marks in an exam! In my opinion, these students are fed up of reading the works of ancient Chinese philosophers and thinkers before the 20th century, and thus know less and less about the values and struggles, the joys and sorrows of great people, which is what made the nation survive till now and become the second largest economy in the world. Therefore, I think we should change the current curriculum and let students put more effort into appreciating the rich cultural heritage of novels, dramas, and even films in the Chinese language. In addition, preparing students for their future by developing skills of making presentations in Chinese can also stimulate pupils to study harder.
Your phrasing is really good here! Most of it sounded very natural, and the type of English you are using is very appropriate for this form of creative writing.
October 21, 2020
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Chinese (Mandarin), English
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