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The twentieth and twenty-first centuries have seen the tremendous changes in many fields. As the society develops by leaps and bounds,young people are more able to make up their minds by themselves. Average education level, a significant element which contributes to the ability to make decisions on their own, is totally different between the contemporary society and the past. Fifty years ago, when most of people were less educated,the young often made decisions based on their parents' experience.Limited to information and knowledge,experience is the vital basement,which is abundant in the aged.Without doubt,parents are more experienced than the young so that the young have no choice but follow their parents to decide what to do.In contrast to the past,nowadays,the young have access to getting high level education ,making it easier to make decisions by their knowledge and horizons. The education view of parents has updated in the past of few years.To be more detailed, parents are aware that they should set their children free instead of taking charge of their lives tightly.For example, my father had to choose a major that his parents thought was potential when he was admitted to a university,cause my grandparents held the view that he lacked experience and should listen to the old,which was always the right choice.Facing to select a major,I was encouraged by my parents that they believed I had the ability to make up my minds and they were always on my back. Last but not the least,I am glad to see that young people can make decisions by themselves.It is also a symbol of independence and self-management.The independence,which is of great importance for the young, can be cultivated by encouragement from parents and a knowledgeable brain. The young will be benefit from making decisions because they have the ability to control their own lives and are taught to be more responsible. Do you know how to improve the expression?
Feb 12, 2022 3:46 AM
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The twentieth and twenty-first centuries have seen tremendous changes in many fields. As society develops by leaps and bounds, young people are more capable of making up their own minds. Average education level, a significant element which contributes to the ability of youth to make decisions on their own, differs totally between contemporary society and the past. Fifty years ago, when most of people were less educated,the young often made decisions based on their parents' experience. Limited in information and knowledge, experience was the basis which the older generation had. Without doubt, parents are more experienced than the young and hence the young had no choice but to accept their parents decisions on what to do. In contrast, nowadays, the young have access to high level education, making it easier to take decisions based on their knowledge and expanded horizons. The view of parents regarding career decisions has changed in the past few years. Parents are now aware they should set their children free instead of taking career decisions for them. For example, my father had to choose a major that his parents thought had potential when he was admitted to a university, because my grandparents held the view that he lacked the experience to decide and should listen to elders, always made the “right choice”. When it was my time to select a major, I was encouraged by my parents to choose for myself, as they believed I had the ability to make up my mind and they were had my back. Last but not least,I am glad to see that young people can make decisions by themselves. It is a symbol of independence and self-management. This independence, which is of great importance for the young, can be cultivated by encouragement from parents. The young will benefit from making decisions because they have the ability to control their own lives and are taught to be more responsible. Do you know how to improve the expression?
Keep short sentences. Break up a long essay into paragraphs. It is easier to read and assimilate.
Feb 12, 2022 5:30 AM
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