Tiffany CHUANG
Please correct me. Thank you! Driving has become the most popular way of traveling since the emergence of cars. I believe that future trends will still revolve around driving, but with cars which are upgraded to be more ecofriendly. First, public transportation, which is usually inefficient, has non-negligible downsides. Take subways as an example, the train stops in every station even though there are no passengers getting in or out. A large amount of energy is used in braking and accelerating, which can even exceed that of driving directly to the destination by ourselves. Moreover, it takes time to transfer between lines or even to buses to reach the destination, and do not mention the time wasted on waiting in lines or walking to the nearest station. In contrast, driving is definitely the best way of traveling. The most stated advantage of driving is probably flexibility. When we are in our car, we are able to decide where to go and when to depart. In addition, we may add any stops during our travel to adapt to everyone's needs. However, there are serious issues, such as air pollution and terrible traffic, that are still to be solved. The problems mentioned above can be resolved by upgrading cars and the whole road system. With the developments in technology, cars in the future will definitely become more fuel-efficient or even consuming renewable energy resources solely. These improvements will reduce our harm to the environment, which is the most criticized point. On the other hand, the advanced road system may compute the optimized routes or routines of traffic lights. With the assistant of big data, we are able to exert the maximum capacity of the roads.The promising advancements in technology would probably diminish the rebelling opinion against this trend.
Sep 24, 2021 3:54 PM
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Please correct me. Thank you! With the invention of cars, driving has become the most popular way of traveling. I believe that future travelling trends will still revolve around driving, but with ecofriendly cars. The current public transportation is rather inefficient with significant issues. Take subways for example, the train stops in every station even though at some stations, no passengers get in or out of trains. A large amount of energy is needed in braking and accelerating, even exceeding that of travelling. Moreover, it takes time to transfer between lines or even to buses to reach the destination. There is also time wasted on waiting in lines or walking to the nearest station. In contrast, driving is definitely the best way of travelling. The biggest advantage in driving is the flexibility. With our car, we can decide when and where to go. In addition, we may add any stops during our travel to suit everyone's needs. However, I admit that there are some serious issues in driving, such as air pollution and terrible traffic that are still to be solved. The precedung problems could be resolved by upgrading the cars and enhancing the entire road system. With the rapid developments in technology, future cars will definitely become more fuel-efficient or even consume only renewable energy. These improvements will reduce the damages to our environment, which is critical. Besides, the future advanced road system may compute the optimized routes or patterns of traffic lights. With big data, we are able to improve the maximum capacity of our roads. The promising advancements in technology would probably diminish the adverse views against using cars in travelling.
It is a very long essay and I believe that the structure could have been much better organised by stating clearly the pros and cons. The current structure is rather loose and rambling. The logic of advancements in technology in favour of driving alone is not robust. It fails to address the issue of excessive cars on the roads. Regardless of the improved road systems, the traffic jams will arise with high car volumes. End of day it is a balance between private abd public transportation.
Sep 24, 2021 10:03 PM
Please correct me. Thank you! Driving has become the most popular way of traveling since the emergence of cars. I believe that future trends will still revolve around driving, but with cars which are upgraded to be more ecofriendly. First, public transportation, which is usually inefficient, has non-negligible downsides. Take subways as an example, the train stops in every station even though there are no passengers getting in or out. A large amount of energy is used in braking and accelerating, which can even exceed that of driving directly to the destination by ourselves. Moreover, it takes time to transfer between lines or even to buses to reach the destination, and do not mention the time wasted on waiting in lines or walking to the nearest station. In contrast, driving is definitely the best way of traveling. The most stated advantage of driving is probably flexibility. When we are in our car, we are able to decide where to go and when to depart. In addition, we may add any stops during our travel to adapt to everyone's needs. However, there are serious issues, such as air pollution and terrible traffic, that are still to be solved. The problems mentioned above can be resolved by upgrading cars and the whole road system. With the developments in technology, cars in the future will definitely become more fuel-efficient or even consuming renewable energy resources solely. These improvements will reduce our harm to the environment, which is the most criticized point. On the other hand, the advanced road system may compute the optimized routes or routines of traffic lights. With the assistant of big data, we are able to exert the maximum capacity of the roads.The promising advancements in technology would probably diminish the rebelling opinion against this trend.
Nice! But pay attention to this: short-sentences are key! Here are some tips: ❌ First, public transportation… ✅ Firstly… ❌ When we are in our car, we are able to decide where to go and when to depart. ✅ A vehicle lets you travel at your own leisure And so on…
Sep 24, 2021 4:08 PM
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Tiffany CHUANG
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Chinese (Mandarin), English
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English