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Writing Exercise 292 – THE GOOD BUY YOU SHOP ONLINE STORE MIGHT BE STOLEN FROM BRAND STORES I just watched online news. It said that the police in Nanjing received reports from some clothing brand chain stores claiming to have their merchandise stolen from time to time after taking the store since this summer. After an investigation, the police caught the thief, who ran an online store that sold brand clothing. The prices were lower than the ones in the stores. He stole the goods from the chain stores once he received online orders. What an online store owner!
Sep 25, 2021 3:33 AM
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Writing Exercise 292 – THE GOOD BUY YOU SHOP ONLINE STORE MIGHT BE STOLEN FROM BRAND STORES I just watched online news. It said that the police in Nanjing received reports from some clothing brand chain stores claiming to have their merchandise stolen from time to time after opening the store this summer. After an investigation, the police caught the thief, who ran an online store that sold brand clothing. The prices were lower than the ones in the stores. He stole the goods from the chain stores once he received online orders. What an online store owner!
This is really good. I wasn't sure what "taking the stores" meant - it could be "taking over the stores", but probably you meant "opening".
September 25, 2021
Writing Exercise 292 – THE GOODS YOU BUY WHEN YOU SHOP ONLINE MIGHT BE STOLEN FROM BRAND STORES I just watched some online news. It said that the police in Nanjing had received reports from some clothing brand chain stores who claimed to have had regular thefts of their merchandise after stock-taking this summer. After an investigation, the police caught the thief, who was running an online store that sold branded clothing. The prices were lower than the ones in the stores. He stole the goods from the chain stores once he received online orders. What an online store owner!
If it sounds too good to be true, it probably is!
September 25, 2021
Writing Exercise 292 – THE GOOD BUY YOU SHOP ONLINE STORE MIGHT BE STOLEN FROM BRAND STORES I just watched the online news which said that the police in Nanjing had received reports from some branded clothing chain stores. These stores claimed that their merchandises were stolen from time to time since this summer. After a thorough investigation, the police caught the thief, who ran an online store forcbranded clothing. The prices were lower than the ones in the stores. He stole the goods from the branded chain stores once he received the online orders. What an online store owner!
Try to use shorter sentences. Longer sentences tend to be woolly.
September 25, 2021
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