The Tim じぁん!!!
Today was a calm, cloudless day. When I was walking home, I saw a strange boy passed by with a cyan parrot on his shoulder. Actually he is one of my neighbor’s kids my mom has told me later, whom seldom, if ever hangs out. I know people pet birds in cages, but a parrot on shoulder without any thread, it was new to me. I wondered why the parrot doesn’t flee and how did that boy train it. Today’s word is “parrot”. I know a parrot names Polly, he always wants a cracker.
Sep 27, 2021 8:13 AM
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Today was a calm, cloudless day. When I was walking home, I saw a strange boy pass by with a cyan parrot on his shoulder. My mom told me later that he is one of my neighbor’s kids, whom seldom, if ever, socialises. I know people keep pet birds in cages, but this parrot on his shoulder without any thread, it was new to me. I wondered why the parrot doesn’t flee and how did that boy train it. Today’s word is “parrot”. I know a parrot named Polly, he always wants a cracker.
Not much to correct again, your first drafts are very good. This reminds me of a famous story about a introverted English boy and his kestrel called Kes. It's worth reading.
Sep 27, 2021 8:39 AM
Today was a calm, cloudless day. When I was walking home, I saw a strange boy passed by with a cyan parrot on his shoulder. He is actually one of my neighbor’s kids my mom has told me later, whom seldom, if ever hangs out. I know people keep pet birds in cages, but a parrot on a shoulder without any thread, it was new to me. I wondered why the parrot doesn’t flee and how did that boy train it. Today’s word is “parrot”. I know a parrot named Polly, he always wants a cracker.
Good English writing with few corrections. Good job!
Sep 27, 2021 10:42 AM
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The Tim じぁん!!!
Language Skills
Chinese (Mandarin), English, Japanese
Learning Language
English