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revision of text I'm student and i wrote the following summary. it's not good. Could you help me to improve it? It was made a monograph about salsify (Tragopogon porifolius L.), also called “oyster plant”, specie of mediterranean origin, boomed as a root vegetable and leaf vegetable between XVI and XIX centuries. Currently marketed it as gourmet product and barely cultivated. It's a plant with interesting agronomic characteristics such as resitance for: drought, extreme temperatures, pests and diseases. Recent investigations show that salsify has active substances with applications to problems: neurological, cardiovascular and liver suffering. Also has high potential for the extraction of fructo-oligosaccharides and industrial oils. Despite its great potential as food, is in a process of "cultural extinction" and / or abandonment of the crop. Brief and scattered information exists about the species, especially on agricultural topics. No sufficiently recent publications that integrate the knowledge generated in centuries and which allows the execution of appropriate agronomic management. It was perfomed a compilation of literature and online sources worldwide. The information was organized and systematized to build a single document based on previous script, the sources were classified to identify priority research topics addressed sufficiently and that require little attention or updates. With the condensation of information available to date, we obtained a paper containing general and technical information sufficient to carry out their growing. This paper contributes to global knowledge of the specie, is expected rise to the conduct of future work on it.
Feb 28, 2012 12:46 AM
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There are times when I am not sure what you are trying to say. What do you mean by ‘boomed,’ for instance? I'm student and I wrote the following summary. It’s not good. Could you help me to improve it? It was made a monograph about salsify (Tragopogon porifolius L.), also called “oyster plant”, a species of mediterranean origin, (boomed) as a root vegetable and leaf vegetable between the XVI and XIX centuries. Currently marketed as gourmet product and barely cultivated, it's a plant with interesting agronomic characteristics such as resistance against drought, extreme temperatures, pests and diseases. Recent investigations show that salsify has active substances with applications to problems: neurological, cardiovascular and liver disease. It also has high potential for the extraction of fructo-oligosaccharides and industrial oils. Despite its great potential as a food, it is in a process of "cultural extinction" and / or abandonment of the crop. Brief and scattered information exists about the species, especially on agricultural topics. No sufficiently recent publications integrate the knowledge generated over centuries and allow the execution of appropriate agronomic management. It has performed a compilation of literature and online sources worldwide. The information was organized and systematized to build a single document based on previous scripts; the sources were classified to identify priority research topics addressed sufficiently and that require little attention or updates. With the condensation of information available to date, we produced a paper containing general and technical information sufficient to carry out their growing. This paper contributes to global knowledge of the species and is expected raise the standard of future work on it.
February 28, 2012
>I'm student and i wrote the following summary. it's not good. Could you help me to improve it? >It was made a monograph about salsify (Tragopogon porifolius L.), also called “oyster plant”, specie >of mediterranean origin, boomed as a root vegetable and leaf vegetable between XVI and XIX centuries. It's easier to correct long passages under "Notebook" where editing tools are available. Also, when you write a summary, it's a good idea to provide the title of the monograph, author, and the date of publication. Also, the Latin name "Tragopogon porrifolius L." has two r's, which is an easy mistake to make, but it's the subject of your summary so it's important to make sure the spelling is correct. Another suggestion I have is for you to simplify the language to the level you feel comfortable working with and is understandable to you.
February 28, 2012
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