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Zerlous
Could someone help me for the grammar checking or improve my writing? This bank car, is manufactured by Mercedes-Benz in 2000, has been serving Tom for more than ten years on daily operations. With needless and inevitable maintenances caused by equipment failure can be disastrous, leading to enormous costs. Being taken into account as regards maximization of performance, maintenance issues, as well as safety considerations, model S-200 and S-220 are proposed for a new replacement with reference to extraordinary engine with environmental base and impeccable engine with 12-cylinder design, respectively. Thanks!
Sep 30, 2012 4:33 PM
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This bank car, manufactured by Mercedes-Benz in 2000, has been serving Tom for more than ten years on daily operations. Needless and inevitable maintenances caused by equipment failure can be disastrous, leading to enormous costs. Taking into account maximization of performance, maintenance issues, as well as safety considerations, model S-200 and S-220 are proposed for a new replacement due to their extraordinary engine with environmental base and impeccable engine with 12-cylinder design, respectively. [Note: Next time, you might want to put text of this length in the Notebook section. Much longer than this and I might not have corrected it. The Notebook section is much better for lengthy text.]
September 30, 2012
Please post this sort of thing in the italki Notebook section
October 1, 2012
Zerlous
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Chinese (Cantonese), English
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English