Carmen
is it correct? (Please, help me!!) Oh you, little, little British Girl, you, British but from Nowhere, because you cannot be more than a dream, you are the sound of a dream, you are the dreamiest being of Nowhere. You walk behind the soul of this city, breathing and ripping up this city, this dirty, ancient and drugged city. But the souls are creations of drunk dreamers, like everything that is real. The Granada’s soul is from other time, from other times, from other sounds and dances; it is full of legends of horsemen without a head or Muslim princesses escaping with unknown cavaliers; it is in the forgotten qasidas and in the reflected light of the moon in the water of a fountain. It is only between the dark and the amber of its nights, always a bit more far away than us.
Jul 6, 2015 1:39 AM
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It's beauitiful did you write that by yoursef?
July 6, 2015
"The Granada’s soul is from other time" <--- maybe change it to "The Granada’s soul is from another time" "horsemen without a head" = "horsemen without heads" "unknown cavaliers" <--- this seems strange. "always a bit more far away than us" <-- "further" is a good way to say "more far" That's a nice text! :)
July 8, 2015
This is the second part of the text, if you see some mistake, I would appreciate that you tell me, thank you :) You can be hidden in the high looking for the Granada’s Soul at the black skyline, but then it would be deep in your heart, oh you little nicest dreamiest British girl, who waits for the snow, who prays for the snow, we could fall in the dark looking for the Granada’s Soul. It could be waiting for us in the heart of the poor artists who die watered in the puddles of its streets, thinking about the pasts that they never had. Oh you little, little Brunette girl, British, but from Nowhere, I have been in the search too, but I didn’t see anything except a wide emptiness, all that I know is that the alcohol is like the Pandora’s box, but I know nothing about the Granada’s Soul.
July 6, 2015
Yes Alan, I know it, but I'm not a premium member and I can't do more post of that kind today.
July 6, 2015
It is a LOT easier to correct posts like this when you post them as a Notebook Entry.
July 6, 2015
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