Is it ok to say it like this? 1st variant “We founded CN in the summer of 2010. Our entrance to the market was marked by the appearance of the so called “live” notebooks which became a breakthrough on the international market of the stationery for children. We concentrate the most of our efforts and energy to implement AR technology on the mass products for children. Our mission is to release the world’s best products with AR for children and remain the leader in this segment.” 2nd variant ...Our market penetration was pulled by the appearance of the so called “live” notebooks which has become a breakthrough on the international market of the stationery for children. We are concentrating the most of our efforts and energy on implementation of AR-technology on the mass production for children. Our goal is creation of the world’s best products with AR for children whilst keeping the leading position in this segment.” Which one is better? How would you say it?