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who can tell me if there is any problem in the following passages? thank you very much! Once I see the question, I think about the interesting story happened when I was a child which I want to share to you. When I was elected as the monitor in grade one, I was very happy because that was the first time I was trusted by others. Then the teacher asked me to have two or three students help cleaning the playground. However no one would like to do. So I’ll give candy to those who will do the work. So I find three students. Think of it carefully, it was an motivate mechanism, wasn’t it? We need to motivate our staffs.
Oct 25, 2008 1:31 AM
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Draft #1: Many different ways to re-tell your story with correct tense/grammar. I thought about an interesting story from my childhood that I want to share with you. When I was in the first grade I was elected classroom monitor! The teacher asked me to enroll several students to help clean the playground. I thought no one would want to do that so decided to offer some candy as an incentive. Three students took the offer and I felt good that my plan to motivate them using candy worked! Motivation can do wonders can't it?
October 25, 2008
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