Yes, on the whole. The only problems are with the definite articles. 1 Sometimes you want to fall asleep and never wake up. Fine. 2 I hate my life I hate myself I hate my job I hate my creator. Fine grammatically, but needs some punctuation. 3 I was standing in the rain waiting for the bus for an hour. Also fine, but it might be more usual to put 'for a hour earlier' in the sentence. It's OK as it, though. 4 Do you take a shower before going to the work? Delete 'the'. Here, 'work' means your place of work, so there is no article. 5 Tom helped me by giving me some money for the food. Again, there shouldn't be a 'the' in this sentence. This is food in general, so we don't use an article. We'd say 'the' if it was a specific purchase of food. For example, if you and Tom were planning a dinner, and you said 'Tom bought the drinks and gave me some money for the food'. This would mean the food for that specific meal (which had been mentioned before).