Jo March
I love writing. Are there any mistakes? I'm a quiet person. The only place where I have to talk is in class. Sometimes I think that teaching is not the career for me although I love teaching. Or maybe I'm not suitable for any job due to the fact that I'm a loner and because I know that I'm not a brilliant talker. It is said that quiet people prefer texting and writing to face-to-face communication, hence they write better than they speak. Personally, I like to spend my free time either reading books and learning new things or writing in my diary or sleeping. I sometimes sit still and do nothing for hours. So most of my time is spent quietly. It is those moments of pure silence and serenity is what I like most of all. However, it has always surprised me how cheerful and outgoing and full of energy I become as soon as I start classes. That's because I care for my students and I like to share knowledge with them and make a difference to their lives. It is a really challenging job. It is an art. It is my superpower.
Jan 16, 2017 1:58 PM
Answers · 4
Jo, this is really an excellent piece of writing. The only error is in the sentence beginning 'It is those moments..'. . This sentence should read either 'It is those moments of pure silence and serenity that I like most of all.' or Those moments of pure silence and serenity are what I like most of all.' Otherwise, it's perfect.
January 16, 2017
Hello Jo, It's almost perfect! Just a couple of things. I would change this sentence: "It is those moments of pure silence and serenity is what I like most of all" to: "Those moments of pure silence and serenity are what I like most of all" or "It's the moments of pure silence and serenity that I like most of all" I'd make the distinction that it's you who is teaching the class. If you say that you talk in class it sounds like you are the student. You can say "The only time where I have to talk is when I'm teaching a class" and " It has always surprised me how cheerful, outgoing and full of energy I become as soon as I start teaching / as soon as I start my classes" to just make this a bit clearer. Also calling yourself a loner has a lot of negative connotations and implies that you're antisocial so I wasn't sure whether you meant loner. If you wanted to say quiet you could call yourself an introvert or say that you like to spend time on your own. Saying "I'm a bit of a loner" adds some irony and takes the edge off a bit as well! I hope that this helps!
January 16, 2017
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