Doron
Can some please review my Linkedin profile header? thanks. Senior R&D Executive | Seeking a New Challenge | Available on Jan 1, 2018 Senior R&D manager with comprehensive knowledge and rich experience in managing and directing multidisciplinary technological innovative projects. Over 10 years of experience in management of managers at various technological fields aiming at product delivery with highly demanding schedules and challenging technical requirements. Seeking an executive management position at a leading technology organization as a VP R&D or similar which would enable me to combine my passion for designing multidisciplinar (HW, SW and more) innovative products with my aspiration to take on a challenging senior leadership role.
Nov 1, 2017 9:28 PM
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This is just an attempt to make the English sound more natural without any comments on the content: Senior R&D Executive | Seeking a New Challenge | Available on Jan 1, 2018 Senior R&D manager with comprehensive knowledge and rich experience of managing and directing innovative multidisciplinary technological projects. Over 10 years of experience in managing managers (*) in various technological fields, aiming to deliver products with challenging technical requirements to highly demanding schedules. Seeking an executive management position at a leading technology organization as a VP R&D or similar, which would enable me to combine my passion for designing innovative multidisciplinary products (HW, SW and more) with my aspiration to take on a challenging senior leadership role. (*) "managing managers" is ok and people do use that phrase sometimes but repeating the first two syllables in consecutive words sounds a bit awkward to me. You could replace "managers" with "senior staff" or "senior executives" (whichever seems more appropriate to you) or alternatively, replace "managing" with "supervising". However, "supervising" might imply that the people working for you were more junior staff (below managerial level), so it's probably safer to change "managers" instead. I hope that helps and good luck finding a new position.
November 2, 2017
I was wondering why you had written R>D instead of R-ampersand-D so I changed it, then it appeared as R>D in my answer too! So I now assume that is an Italki problem and you had written it correctly in the first place.
November 2, 2017
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