This was really good! Sounds like a native speaker. I don't know why your italki English rating is so low, unless you had a lot of help writing this/someone else wrote it, your English rating should be higher, in my opinion. Maybe speaker/comprehension are harder for you. I don't know, just my input.
The only tiny little thing I would change is that when referring to sea levels the common word to use is "rise" instead of "increase." Increase makes perfect sense, and it would be okay if you said it, however "rise" is just the word that most common in this context. You will often hear people referring to "rising sea levels."