Nguyen Ngoc Ha
Hi there, could you please help to correct paragraph below? thank you in advance! I am a grumpy man, perhaps. But with my years experience, I am getting quite good at look after materials. My manager is very happy with my work although he has never told that. For instance, onetime he asked warehouse and administration teams to get performance rating by oneself, I got 3.8 per 5.0. After he discussed with management team, they gave me 4.43. This is the excellent rating. When I submitted leave job application, they agreed and gave me three weeks off, after travelling, I could back to work. But I refused, I left job and traveled Europe two months ago. I am unemployment now. Near day, he still sent SMS to ask me came back company. Of course I did not go back, I want to find a new job, new company to challenges myself.
Nov 10, 2018 8:16 AM
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Hi Nguyen, this type of question would be better in Notebook because there it is possible to highlight mistakes or corrections so you can easily see what has been changed. I suggest you take a look and add this question there instead https://www.italki.com/notebooks
November 10, 2018
Here's one version :) I am a grumpy man, perhaps, but with all my years experience I am getting quite good at looking after materials. My manager is very happy with my work, although he has never told me that. For instance, once he asked the warehouse and administration teams to do a performance rating on myself. I got 3.8 per 5.0. After he discussed the same with the management team, they gave me 4.43. This is an excellent rating. When I submitted a leave job application, they agreed and gave me three weeks off to travel allowing me to return after these three weeks. But I refused and I left the job and traveled to Europe. This was two months ago and now I am unemployed. Recently, my previous manager sent me an SMS to ask me to come back to the company. I am not interested in going back though as I want to find a new job and a new company to challenge myself.
November 10, 2018
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Nguyen Ngoc Ha
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