Hi Laura. Nice job, this is excellent writing. I do have a couple of suggestions. You might want to reconsider the use of erudition. Keep in mind that it typically is associated with "book" learning, not experiential learning. So if it is important to communicate that you have practical experience working with the land, farmers, organic techniques etc. erudite might suggest those experiences are lacking. Also in the final sentence, change the words environment and agriculture to their adjective forms (environmental and agricultural) as they are modifying/describing the noun "matters". Hope this helps! Ellen