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Does this text sound ok to you? Hi Guys, I'd have two questions about this text: - is "no longer a thing" ok to use in this context? - is "welcomes" grammatically correct here? Word underlines it but I thought this should be ok.. thanks for you help!! :) "Luckily, cold and unfriendly hospital environment is no longer a thing. Our private health and beauty centre welcomes its patients in a modern, relaxing and comfortable environment, and the most hospitable staff helps them to overcome their apprehensions. You can feel safe in the hands of our highly qualified and experienced team of OB/GYN physicians, who will care for you with the greatest expertise and empathy."
Aug 28, 2019 6:23 AM
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"Is no longer a thing" is very informal, and perhaps not best in this context. Perhaps no longer an issue, or no longer a problem would be better used here. "Welcomes" is certainly grammatically correct. Apprehension is always singular, by the way, not plural.
August 28, 2019
ok, so i have revised the whole text.. what do you think about this one? Women often experience anxiety about their annual gynaecological exam, even though they know that this short and painless examination can prevent several serious illnesses and save lives. Our modern health center has been designed to create a relaxing and comfortable environment so that you can quickly overcome those fears and concerns. Our friendly and knowledgeable staff will answer all your questions and guide you through the whole treatment process. Our aim is to create a spa-like atmosphere rather than sticking to the conventional hospital setting. You can feel safe in the hands of our highly qualified and experienced team of OB/GYN physicians, who will care for you with the greatest expertise and empathy.
August 28, 2019
Hi Gary, if there are other errors, could you please correct them. i thought that the rest of the text was ok..
August 28, 2019
What about the rest of the errors?
August 28, 2019
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